In the Kabul Bazaar

[Tanner]

You that day
Were complexity showing off her virtuous wares
In the vivid marketplace

The Afghan peddlers
With their hammered copper ewers
Clumped together
Amid the pomegranate-coloured rugs piled high
From Mazar-i-Sharif

Where does that burnished space
Now reside
Infinitely split into numinous worlds

If I could go back
Put my hand firmly in yours
That day
The languorous flies draped like a black chadri
On dangling Halal goats

If I could go

[Suz-zen]

Tanner REAlly like:
Where does that burnished space
Now reside
Infinitely split into numinous worlds

[Tanner]

Thanks for your comment. I used to live in Afghanistan as a teenager for a couple of years.

[D.F.Russell]

Possibly this is a difference in age...

You have a unique vision and wording; but I think your work would improve substantially, if it were less e e cummings and bit more Strunk & White.

These days, very few people know who e e cummings is/was, but almost everyone knows Mark Twain. What's below was written by Mr. Clemmens as a eulogy his daughter, Olivia Susan Clemens, and shows why he is remembered.

Warm summer sun,
Shine kindly here,
Warm southern wind,
Blow softly here.
Green sod above,
Lie light, lie light.
Good night, dear heart,
Good night, good night.

[MHenry]

It would be nice to remembered for centuries, but a day in the sun is also good. I love this, Tanner. Beautiful, exotic images. Thanks for posting.

[D.F.Russell]

So there are no misunderstandings, my comments were intended as helpful. If anyone was offended, my apologies.

[MHenry]

And taken as helpful on my part. I did not mean to diminish your constructive criticism, D.F. Russell. I meant only to say that Samuel is a hard act to follow.

[grant hayes]

Powerfully evocative of place in a few deftly handled details. Romantic in the best sense.

[Suz-zen]

Tanner Congratulations on the Honorable Mention my friend! Though I would have preferred to see this as an official winner ... it is a winner of a myriad of accolades in MY book! You know I am a fan of your work!

I have oft visited this place:
Amid the pomegranate-coloured rugs piled high...
longing for the:

that day!

Bravo!!

[Sister Greed]

Michael, congratulations on your well-deserved honorable mentions. Your poetry is truly affecting!

[Tanner]

SZ & SZ, I value your poetry and your friendship, both of which are life enhancing.

[grant hayes]

Congratulations, Tanner, on this well deserved honour. You have plenty of true believers in your poetry here at RhymeZone, but it should be much more widely recognised. I hope this honourable mention encourages you to venture farther and look for avenues that will widen your readership.

[AlexandratheLate]

Congratulations Tanner!! This is a winner in my book.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Congratulations Tanner!

[lunar glide]

This is beautiful. congratulations

[provodeckandfence]

Great writing. Thanks for sharing.
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