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    I remember how the wind tapped me
    To show me carefree
    I remember how the sun tapped me
    To show me joy
    I remember how the snow tapped me
    To show me breeze
    I remember how the rain tapped me
    To show me who to call
    I remember most the sound of his palm
    To show me I am his pawn
    Same story where we both fawn
    While we hold hands and smile
    Turning up the corner of our mouth
    Who knew it could be so vile?
    Love is what I sought
    My lies is what he bought
    He just never knew
    That he had a broken screw
    Only liked him sober
    I would be a punching bag before his hangover
    Started to hate it both way
    His mind became a maze
    That when I started losing faith
    For the first time wishing he would work late
    My heart called for salvation
    Who knew I could lose all sensation?
    His fists became trendy
    I forgot the wind’s carefree
    I forgot the sun’s joy
    I forgot the snow’s breeze
    Plus who was there to call?
    His fists, and my whole body’s numb
    That’s when I knew I was his pawn
    The time is dawn his sounds are loud
    They could hear
    But there was fear
    Smell of booze
    Nothing else to lose
    In a dangerous world
    Would I remain attached to this cord?
    Decided to step outside
    The world was bright
    So pretty
    I remember how the wind tapped me
    To show me carefree
    I decided to be free
    I remember how the sun tapped me
    To show me joy
    So I decided to know joy
    I remember how the snow tapped me
    So I decided to feel the breeze
    I remembered how the rain tapped me
    To show me who to call
    So I knew who to call
    Never again will I become a man’s pawn
    That was my choice
    allowed myself to be toyed
    Not afraid to love again
    won’t allow myself to be condemned
    Life with him was unpredictable
    Won’t allow myself to be despicable
    He was pitiful and shameful
    So I will giggle and be grateful
    I’m alive
    Won’t allow myself to be brutalized
    I am loved and swell
    I chose to love myself
    Now I am carefree
    Now I know joy
    No I feel the breeze
    Now I know who to call

    I am, I know, I feel all of these things, me, myself, and I.
    Last edited by Hawa Diawara; 03-28-2016, 07:39 PM.

  • #2
    I like the cadence of your poem, and the way it builds to the climax of your aliveness. I also enjoyed the reverse structure you used. I'm sure there's a proper name for that. also, if you don't mind me saying so, your sentences are beautifully constructed. You can feel the energy upon reading!

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    • Hawa Diawara
      Hawa Diawara commented
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      thank you so much for reading my poem Sister Greed, and for the nice comment.

  • #3
    You're so welcome -- it's my pleasure!

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