SIXTY YEARS CAGED

[The kurlman]

POEM #306

SIXTY YEARS CAGED
Sixty years caged,
Happily engaged.
True love when started,
Soon was departed.
My young years vanished,
Now forever banished.
Heart broken with grief,
Is there no relief?
Nothing for me here,
Do I stay from fear?
Can happiness be found?
Or am I sadness bound?
A coward won't leave,
Stay and cling and cleave.
Cheating was the crime,
Stealing years of time.
Starting over again,
Where, how do I begin?
Sixty years of my life,
Given a untrue wife!
Shouting out my plea,
Find someone for me!

Written by Carl Mann
The kurlman
1-4-2015
Pleasant Hill, Ohio

[paintbrushguitar]

That's very deep. May I suggest using more metaphors or descriptive language in your poetry. It allows readers to connect and find their own interpretations of your words. Plus it makes the reader feel the pain and feel the emotion you're trying to portray. Overall it is very good. I'm just offering a suggestion

[Guest]

I understand! Truly I do. I think it was very well spoken and I felt your pain! Good job again and always

[rhymarhyma]

Deeeeep, kid. Absolutely. Well written.

[The kurlman]

Thanks for the very kind WORDS

[boiseconcretepros]

Very deep. Truly a sad story but very good writing. Thanks for sharing.
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