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    POEM #101

    WHO'S IN MY ROOM
    A cow in my room,
    A cow with a broom!
    A lion in my bed,
    Is not yellow but red!
    Animals three feet deep,
    Quiet not even a peep!
    Room filled side to side,
    A giraffe called Clyde!
    Some animals have been found,
    On the ceiling upside down!
    A rabbit sitting in my chair,
    It has a blue bow in its hair!
    Should I laugh or scream?
    Is this just a dream?
    Afraid to open my eyes,
    These animals could be spies!
    With eyes wide open I stare,
    My oh my, my room is bare!

    Written by Carl Mann
    The kurlman
    4-15-14
    Pleasant Hill, Ohio

    Last edited by The kurlman; 01-04-2015, 02:45 PM. Reason: It was pointed out, I made a mistake ! Thanks for doing a great job of critiquing my poem! The kurlman

  • #2
    "I don't like green eggs and ham, I don't like them, sam-i-am." Not my taste, but done well.

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    • #3
      This sort of thing is difficult to pull off.

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      • #4
        cute!

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        • #5
          Thanks Pamela, I like feedback! It was a CUTE POEM to write! The kurlman

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          • #6
            Another one that would make a great children's book. Would love to see the artwork that you would pair up with each line. Nice work Carl.

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            • #7
              D.F. RUSSELL, Sorry I missed answering your comment on my poem WHO'S IN MY ROOM! A very belated THANK YOU. The kurlman

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              • #8
                I enjoyed it -- had a touch of Ogden Nash, I thought.

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