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  • Melissa F
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    Agree with the others. I might try to change some wording here and there and I think it could be even better, but regardless, such a beautiful idea. Thanks for sharing

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  • stopeka
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    Thank you so much, kcmcnerney! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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  • kcmcnerney
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    That is such a beautiful poem. I couldn't take my eyes off it. I love it so much!

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  • stopeka
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    Thank you, Frankie!

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  • Frankie
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    Really well done! I love it!

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  • stopeka
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    Thank you for your feedback, JC Sullivan!

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  • JC Sullivan
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    I love coffee and adore this poem! It was so visual and well done. Keep writing! Please.

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  • AnotherHumanBeing
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    You're welcome! . Would you kindly read one of my poems and give feedback? I would love to hear what you think of my poem, although I am not as good as yourself.

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  • stopeka
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    Thank you, AnotherHumanBeing. Your thoughts and feedback are much appreciated!

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  • AnotherHumanBeing
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    This is an impeccable poem! I absolutely adore the way you described how the man felt. Absolutely amazing!

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  • stopeka
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    Thank you so much, Electron John. You were extremely kind with your words. This poem actually came about when someone challenged me to write a poem about coffee. It was based on an older gentleman I knew at the time. I am fairly new, just a couple of years, at writing poetry, but I really enjoy it. I appreciate your encouragement and feedback.
    Last edited by stopeka; 01-20-2015, 05:10 PM.

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  • Electron.John
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    That was outstanding. No really. That is so good I googled it to see if someone famous wrote it. I want to read it again and again. I want to print it out and share it with my friends and family. If you tell me that is your first attempt ever at writing poetry I will hate you so hard your head will explode. Same if you never post anymore of your work.

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  • stopeka
    started a topic A Single Cup

    A Single Cup

    A Single Cup

    Empty mugs set side by side,
    One for him, one for his bride.
    His feeble hands lift to pour,
    A single cup. Two, no more.

    Robust coffee feeds a soul,
    Transitioning to half a whole.
    Her essence now consumes the room,
    Where he once lived as her groom.

    Ceramic warms an aching hand.
    Eyes peruse his wedding band.
    Steam emerges from his cup.
    Tender memories wailing up.

    Trembling fingers take a sip.
    Deeper in he starts to slip.
    Love and laughter. Pain and fear.
    Watching as the end grew near.

    Bold taste lingers on his tongue.
    Hands caress her face of young.
    A vision in her favorite pearls,
    Surrounded by her golden curls.

    Rich aroma taints the air.
    Days spent prisoner to the chair.
    Drinking slowly, so alone.
    Lost and lonely to the bone.

    Swallows hard his liquid brew,
    Aching for the love he knew.
    His grieving spirit longs to heal,
    From daily life now so surreal.

    An empty cup. A heavy heart,
    Trying not to fall apart.
    His feeble hands lift to pour,
    A single cup. Two, no more.

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