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Thank you! Yes, I agree the "fuckings" aren't very much in place for the flow; however, my friend had some ideas for typo changes and break-downs when it would be turned into music so as music they work, but as written word without rhythm they don't fit well.
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Music? Not bad lyrics, but believe it or not I think the "fuckings" might break up the flow a little bit. That word can have an impact, but my advice would be to use it sparingly.
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This poem makes me feel apologetic. It flows nicely, and I certainly feel your frustration. Thank you for sharing!
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Terrible Lyrics for Terrible People
Hello, I'm sorry I've come back againI've been lonely lately and I could use a friendLet me speak and then I'll leaveI've lost the last person I could grieveWasted, I'll tell you everythingStoned, I'll earn my angel's wingsI gave up on the sun, my days have never been the sameI felt your warmth fade from my body, shaking out of shame
Bite me back, I've had enoughI'll show you how I can be tough
Down and down the rabbit hole
Who knows how far it really goes
Down and down the bottles flow
Who knows how low you'll let this go
I know you'll never care,
We could've gone anywhere,
If we'd stayed in bed that day
Maybe you'd have the strength to stay
We could've had it all,
But even angels have to fall
Your friends were right all along
And now you're just a sad fucking song
Bite me back, I've had enough
I'll show you how I can be tough
Down and down the rabbit hole
Who knows how fucking far it goes
Down and down the bottles flow
Who knows how god damn low you'll go
Inside you surge capricious tides,
Another world you'd always hide
Vicious swells pull me under,
Crush my pride and steal my thunder
Swallow your silence this time
Choke down bitter words of mine
Bite me back, break my neck
Strength is hard, it's easier to wreck
Down and down we'll always go
How did we find ourselves so low?
I've been lonely, I could use a friend
Hard to believe we are alone at the end.
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