Can someone write a lyric for a song with a prewritten vocal melody?

[We Sound as One]

Sure thing. Just replied your email. Cheers.

[victor]

i'm anxious to hear your changes... perhaps there's a better way to communicate than a message board?

[We Sound as One]

Thanks mate, I think both verses are great.
Just did some modification (and add some alternatives) in the bridge and chorus.
They sound a bit better when I try to sing (I'm not a singer by the way),
Please have a look:
Chorus:
Through the sound of your heart beating
underneath our harmony (or We create our harmony or we can perfect our harmony)
purely musical
through the times that we're breathing
We can build our melody
Simply beautiful

Bridge:
there's a distant sound.
only heard by some
from here to a far kingdom
louder becomes…
And here it comes the drums.

Yes, I added drums in the end to create some impact and the song changes dramatically..
I'll update a new version of the song soon so you will understand.

Thanks!

[Vincent]

thanks, good luck with the write and the finish. see you on the boards..

[victor]

i have tried to follow your suggestions... alsoi have modified
the chorus from verse to verse (just slightly), but of course
the first can be repeated instead.
the last line in verse 2, you said i could add syllables, but
i just can't hear it, as is the line goes:
"our love in circles that won't end"
it would be easy to add 1 syllable ... that will not end
or two: ... that will never end


Need lyrics song 01 May 2023 v2

i hear in your breathing
distant whispers echo . .(chorus)
they're musical
and through lives we're living
mysteries only love can know
so beautiful

and when you look into the sky .(verse 1)
or gaze into the endless sea
the starlight opens in your eye
tides that bring you back to me

music in your breathing .(chorus 2)
whispers in my inner ear
immutable
so we are left perceiving
mysteries only love can hear
so beautiful

and time has joined our hearts before .(verse 2)
and it has joined them once again
as time eternally restores
our love in circles that won't end

i hear in your breathing
whispers like an echo .(chorus 3)
so musical
and through the lives we're living
mysteries only love can know
so beautiful

there's a distant drum .(bridge)
only heard by some
from here to kingdom come it pounds
i hear the sound

the sound of your heart beating
underneath our harmony .(chorus 4)
is musical
through the lives we're living
movement of the melody
is beautiful

i hear in your breathing
whispers like an echo .(chorus 1)
so musical
through the lives we're living
mysteries only love can know
so beautiful

[victor]

thanks for the feedback. i'll carry on. will post again soon

[We Sound as One]

That's beautiful, mate but I couldn't fit the words in cadence of the song 🤔

[We Sound as One]

Thanks mate, good stuff for first take 😊
Yes, there will be lots of communication till get the end version.
Here my observations:
Let’s start with the verse 1:
the way you look into the sky
the way you stare into the sea
silently they tell me more
they say you've come this way before

Obs:
I like the 2 first sentences but sky and sea got out of rhyme, I Believe it would be nice to rhyme 1st sentence with the 3^rd and 2^nd with 4^th. So, I did a variation:

the way you look into the sky
the way you stare into the sea
silently they tell me more and why
Incomparable chemistry

Just an example you can change (or anyone that is reading this could help as well) for any sentence that rhymes with sea (like free, be, flee, ancestry, etc…)

Of course, you can change from sea to shore and keep the rhyme, but I still prefer sea than shore 😊


Second verse:
my heart has known your heart before (not sure about repeating the same word in sentence) 🤨
and I will know it once again
our love eternally restores
in circles that will never end
Maybe:
my heart has known your soul before
and I will know it once again – Maybe there’s a better way to say that…
- our love eternally restores – beautiful!
in circles that will never end – great! If you listen to the song in the second verse there’s a different chord progression that maybe can prolong the sentence, so I just include some words, that also can be changed:
- our lives move in circles that will never ever end
Well, Chorus…
That’s the main part of the song and should be the best and catchy…
I couldn’t figure out how those words you wrote fit the piano melody and although they are beautiful, I don’t think they are doing the main link with the verses.
Chorus should tell the topic of song and be the most memorable and emotional part.
So, let’s think about it again.
It’s also very important to fit the piano melody and have easy rhymes with similar numbers of syllables to make it easier to listen.
This chorus has 2 parts, each one with 3 sentences so the rhyme / syllables structure for the 6 sentences would be:
1^st with 4^th
2^nd with 5^th and
3^rd with 6^th

Bridge will change accordingly as well.
Does it make sense?
Sorry to be a meticulous pain in the ass but that’s the way things get better 😊
Thanks, and if you want it, let’s keep working on it!

[victor]

try these. i hope they help. i'm very impressed with the music. please let me know what you think. i can modify.

Need lyrics song 01 May 2023 v1

listen hear the sound (chorus)
it is faint and beautiful
~
and so profound
~ 0.13~0.17
it's serene and musical
it's all around

the way you look into the sky (verse 1)
the way you stare into the sea
silently they tell me more
they say you've come this way before

listen hear the sound (chorus)
it is faint and beautiful
~
and so profound
~
it's serene and musical
it's all around

my heart has known your heart before (verse 2)
and i will know it once again
our love eternally restores
in circles that will never end

listen hear the sound (chorus)
it is faint and beautiful
~
and so profound
~
it's serene and musical
it's all around

there's a distant drum (bridge)
only heard by some
from here to kingdom come it calls

listen hear the sound (chorus)
it is faint and beautiful
~
and so profound
~
it's serene and musical
it's all around

listen hear the sound (chorus)
it is faint and beautiful
~
and so profound
~
it's serene and musical
it's all around

[Vincent]

I wrote this as it was on the video clip, a s and a verse. had fun with this. Vincent


time carries all the memories
simple thought...... any simple day.
I promised love to remember...

The years they will leave Us
waiting here still unclaimed,
how long love coming back.
==============================
V1
life moves like the sifting sands...I remember that
life is inside and around ....
its up and down it burns deep in souls
don`t let go it will leave you behind...

[victor]

this is totally beautiful. magical

[We Sound as One]

Thanks mate, to be honest you can write about whatever you feel that fits the song. I usually prefers lyrics that are easier to be related to, but this song sounds more ethereal...
It's a good writing exercise to put ideas and words in a space designed to the song, can be a bit challenge but for sure is fun.
Yes, love , relationships are always good topics but again, as long as you follow the cadence of the piano, let your soul write with the flow
That sounds poetic
Thanks again.

[Vincent]

I would write a verse, but I would like to know a topic? love ,hate, leaving staying nature...something you want..know what I mean?

[We Sound as One]

Great! Go for it! Any doubt, suggestion, please let me know.
Thanks!

[The Kid In A Cell]

I'd Like to hop in too.