The devil, angels and me

[The second]

The devil, angels and me

The devil you are
Leading me to write
Leading me to wrong
Sucking me in
Tug of war
Pull against sin
Eyes of sunrise
Droplets of salt water
Dew of our skin
Grace of a mare
Lips you share
Sheets strewn about
Hands in my hair
Your tongue
Mutters out
In the end
Bitter goodbye
Sometimes asleep
A letter penned
Always a sigh
Mostly the key
The devil you are
Through the night
Slain in the morning
Angels and me

Rds
The second

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Succinctly battled, TS - beautiful versing, as always.

[The second]

thanks with much appreciation rlw

[Sureme]

Sometimes I think without reality we would never had left the caves, nicely put but that last line I think should be ''The devil, angels and me''

[The second]

my dear friend, I Enjoy living in my cave. I post my writings ,work, art, what ever you may call it or them without editorial. I respect all the creators here in the zone. I have never suggested any other writer of editing their work unless asked upon, even then, I am not their author. so please don't be mine

[Sureme]

Hi, I was talking about caves early humans and their curiosity to learned from the reality of their own existence long before devils angels and gods were written about, but that's not what you're on about so I have to ask does the reader here not have an opinion on what they read I mean it's not that we are in a shop to buy, as I said, nicely put but that last line I still think should be ''The devil, angels and me'' again nicely put

[The second]

you absolutely have an opinion but not an editorial one unless asked. This is not a work shop. This is a gift of technology. expression to the masses. Please don't come here wanting to change lines. Express your likes, Express your work, express your opinions about yourself but don't come here and tell me what I should have written. I apologize for being brash but in this day and age
you need to be told what needs to be told. Droplets of rain appear as liquid crystal in summer but in winter they fall as diamonds non like the other

[Sureme]

(don't come here and tell me what I should have written) I never did that what I'm saying is (nicely put but that last line I think should be ''The devil, angels and me'')

[victor]

very lovely verse.
one of the best i've read on this board