Life of the planets at the bar

[The second]

Life of the planets at the bar

Mars showed red
Because Venus was high
Shinning like a jewel
In a summer night sky
I watched her so closely
Still being wise
Mars with his warring
Might be my demise
I listened to music
That played in my ears
I listened to rumors
At the bar drinking beers
I listened and listened
As everyone spoke
Venus and Mars
That affair aint no joke
Suddenly seeing
Out of the dark
Jupiter glaring
A bright welding spark
Venus kept dancing
With dazzle and flair
Mars kept injecting
His warrior stare
Jove will not have it
On his solemn watch
Venus be golden
Mars, kicked in the crotch
Terra in terror
Caught in the seam
Drunk and in blue
This must be a dream
Mercury burning
Maybe it seems
The sun still had pity
In its radiant streams
Uranus is jealous
And cold just the same
With diamonds and rings
Saturn, never feels shame
Neptune is washed up
An ice ocean of time
fourteen moons to support
feels like a crime
I still had my glass
I still had a beer
I thought I had seen
All the planets right here
But Pluto The dwarf
Seems I forgot
Poor little bastard,
At the bar, lost his spot


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The second

[RhymeLovingWriter]

What fun to read! I was intrigued as I started reading this...wondering how you were going to bring seemingly disparate objects together (i.e planets and the bar)...and as always, TS, you did not disappoint! Great visuals for me as I read through this, even though the nightlife scene is something of my younger years. And Pluto - aww - poor Pluto - I laughed aloud, and am still smiling. Thanks for that!

[Johntee]

A Solar Tour de Force

And yes, orbit uncleared,
Pluto slighted to dwarf.

[The second]

muchas gracias rlw and big j i'm glad you read and enjoyed

[AlexandratheLate]

This was fun to read the way you used the planets to tell the tale. Great poem TS. 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻