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|| Lost and afraid (please help) ||- Comfort -||

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  • DepressingPoem
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    Ig it just dosen't flow as well as it could have

  • RhymeLovingWriter
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    DP, could you be more specific in the type of comments you are looking for?

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  • || Lost and afraid (please help) ||- Comfort -||

    Lost and afraid

    lost in a cold dead world
    old or young still hurled
    stuck on a doomed planet
    thrown into a place with no habit

    asked to give yourself to the world
    never to question if you really should
    dare to ask and be put down

    another day in our world
    forgotten and lost by god
    really and eternally alone
    an afterthought not a priority
    in the end what comes first is us
    deep down that all we truely care about

    peace on earth only for a self
    love and hate are our emotions
    enchantment relative to self
    another thing we have to think of
    she is only how you see her to you
    end of they day your in love with yourself

    hate is hated because it hurts
    empathy an illusion we live in
    life no more than this who are we
    pawns in the universes game


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    Comfort

    The night a dark swirl of emotions
    realization noting matters no one cares
    untrue comforts begin to fell my head
    empty my soul begins to dread
    left to think to ponder of life
    yet still i act like i want to try

    lost in a swirl of pain sorrow
    intertwined with my sins forever
    even on the marrow of my death
    still I'm cold, broken, lost

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    Please let me know how I can improve (:
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