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    {|:::[ Note: I'm not sure how I or anyone else could put a title on this ]:::|}


    I can't feel can't feel
    can't feel its all dull
    I can't hear a thing
    it all quiet its to quiet
    its dull broken somethings missing
    I'm missing


    dull as the knife slides into my arm
    dull as the blood drips flows and pools
    dull as I get dizzy and can't walk strait
    dull as I stumble and stumble and break
    dull as I lie in the bath so there's not a mess
    dull as I fade with only stupid regret
    dull as I wake up in the hospital bed
    dull as I slowly recover again

    let me end the pain of life
    or let me feel the sting of the knife

  • #2
    Darkness overwhelming...in the end overwhelmed, by life, making way for return and a chance to try again.

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    • #3
      This is so sadly the cycle of people who have so much internal pain. Well written poet.

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      • #4
        A well written description of the desparation that some people feel

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        • #5
          DepressingPoem - You got to focus on a dream to change in a direction that dilutes desperation. We all can use that second chance sometimes. This and its title hit home. Namyh
          Last edited by Namyh; 01-10-2022, 03:47 PM.

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          • #6
            Because you used the word so many times... and it fits the overall feeling portrayed (I think?).. I would probably have named it Dull if I had written this.

            Well written. Great work.

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            • DepressingPoem
              DepressingPoem commented
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              I figured if that where me I wouldn't have the energy creativity the umm the mind to change the words keeping it duller seemed fitting to me.. and thank you

          • #7
            Originally posted by DepressingPoem View Post
            I figured if that where me I wouldn't have the energy creativity the umm the mind to change the words keeping it duller seemed fitting to me.. and thank you
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            "{|:::[ Note: I'm not sure how I or anyone else could put a title on this ]:::|}"


            Look at that, you knew exactly how you could put a title on this

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