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  • An incomplete lyric I wrote and can't finish

    We’re like two birds in a single cage

    One wants to go while the other stays

    And no one sings today, no

    And no one sings today at all



    You tell me I made you happy

    And I say that cannot be the case

    You say I don’t know what I’m saying

    But you can’t look right at my face




    When you think that hurting is the norm now

    When you think love’s meant to feel that way

    I’ll know you want me when you hurt me

    I’ll smile while I cry myself away




    Cause we’re like two birds in a single cage, yeah

    One wants to go while the other stays

    No no one sings today at all

    Yeah no sone sings today at all

    I sit in silence while you fly away



    It’s been a while and the cage is empty now

    Lined with old memories I let fade

    I’d pay good money to forget you, yeah

    Erase the days we smiled and sang




    There is no blame to share with you

    There is no way I’d tell the truth

    So much I need to tell you, babe

    But my words are sharp when they’re words for you

  • #2
    Nicely crafted. What about a repeat of this section:

    Cause we’re like two birds in a single cage, yeah

    One wants to go while the other stays

    No no one sings today at all

    Yeah no sone sings today at all

    I sit in silence while you fly away



    only play around with the last line or two to set it in past tense?

    Just a thought.

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    • CeramicCornflake
      CeramicCornflake commented
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      I think I had planned on that being the chorus, so that is a good suggestion. To be honest, I have no plans to finish it or actually put it to music. I don’t have instruments anymore. No one had ever seen it, so I thought I’d share here. It isn’t my favorite writing I’ve done, but I’m not ashamed haha.

      Thanks for taking the time to read it

  • #3
    Dude, this is not about a hot pocket LOL
    I was like did I misread that? Or maybe it is... I shouldn't' judge.

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