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  • In a blue sea

    Hope you found enough space between us
    Moving towns and around
    Hope your nights are peaceful and you catch some sleep
    Without thinking of me
    But if all the love you felt now seethes in agony
    Know it's for you and for me

    I still dream of your hands
    And how you breathe
    I wish I could see myself in your eyes
    And tell you this time
    I'll do what it takes
    To keep you
    Keep you in my life

    Theres no better or worse
    I'm stuck so deep
    I know sunny days lay ahead
    No matter the weather I'm numbed to not feel
    No laughter, no bliss, all dull and so bleak

    I still dream of your hands
    And how you breathe
    I wish I could see myself in your eyes
    And tell you this time I bleed
    I'd crawl on my knees
    To keep you
    To keep you in my life

    My mistake fills me with regret
    My nightmares come in every waking day and you're not there

    I wish I could see myself in your eyes
    And tell you this time
    I always wanted you for me

  • #2
    Good poetry, thank you for posting. I love your 'voice' and it sorta rang like a song, with the chorus and all, -- the phrasings were all significant and it was tinged with a sweet romance, sometimes startling-

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    • amenOra
      amenOra commented
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      And welcome!

    • Desolate96
      Desolate96 commented
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      Thank you so much for your kind words I was nervous putting out somewhere but this seems like such a lovely community to do so!

  • #3
    I agree with amenOra about the melodic voice on this one. It 'feels' to have been written from truth. I second the welcome too - keep posting!

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    • Desolate96
      Desolate96 commented
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      Definitely came from the heart thank you!
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