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    The Beast Within

    The Beast within me walks the Earth
    thru rains of joy, thru smokes of mirth
    dragging behind the dregs of men –
    Self Doubt, Despair, even Lust’s mayhem.

    Unchecked, unbridled it destroys Ideas
    by injecting its venom of a thousand Fears
    which paralyze and stifle Man’s thoughts of gain,
    strangling even seeds of a poisoned brain.

    Out from the night with reins of Light,
    my Heart makes gallop this Beast of might.
    Traversing the distance to Fact from Idea
    makes the Beast sweat antidotes for a thousand Fears.


    For to turn an Idea into a Fact,
    it must be sowed to reap an Act
    which in turn when sowed, as you may have it,
    is the Act giving birth to a brand new Habit.

    Now take that Habit, sow once again
    and you’ll reap a Character that rivals Men.
    And Character thus made, a fact to see,
    can make you inherit a Destiny.

    No Dream will turn to dust this hour.
    I’ll not let loose the Beast or cower.
    I’ll hold the reins, winged chariot of Wind,
    and ride as Master of the Beast within.


    Namyh
    Last edited by Namyh; 09-04-2019, 11:28 AM.

  • #2
    Lots of motion in this one. Good action verbs. Last line of S3 was a bit unwieldy when recited aloud. Nice progression of thought overall.

    I was confused on the first word of S4LS - "Qit"? I'm guessing just a typo?

    Nice to see your name in the queue Namyh !

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    • #3
      RLW - Yeah, it was a typo but more importantly I'm mighty glad you came along for this ride of motion, action and progression. No scribbler of words could ask for more. Thanks RLW. Namyh
      Last edited by Namyh; 09-03-2019, 01:35 PM.

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      • #4
        Nice! Had a very nice Shakespearean flare to it! Well done Namyh !

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        • #5
          Flair is a good word for this. I was carried along by the words which did indeed give me an excellent ride.

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          • Rhymeboy
            Rhymeboy commented
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            Lol!!!! Thanks for the correction on 'flare vs flair'These homophones are gonna kill me one day!!! Lol!!!

        • #6
          The flow of the idea, on the waves of the words... a well reined beast this is, Namyh!

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          • #7
            Rhymeboy - "Shakespearean flair".......I like that. Now that brings out the "Beast" in my poet's heart. Thanks RB. Namyh

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            • #8
              Parkinsonspoet - For poets, we just never know where that Beast is gonna to take us. Perhaps therein lies the thrill of the scribble. I'm so glad you came along for the ride. All aboard! Namyh

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              • RhymeLovingWriter
                RhymeLovingWriter commented
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                The "thrill of the scribble"? That's a title all by itself, waiting for a body to follow.

            • #9
              Muttado - Mighty glad you rode the waves with the rest of us. Surfs up!...and thanks M. Namyh

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              • #10
                Rhymeboy - Thanks for liking this too. Namyh

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