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  • Pretty Bird

    An interesting poem that has a unique historical context! I hope you enjoy!

    PRETTY BIRD

    A long time ago ----- in Africa
    I was ---- a Pretty Bird
    I rode the backs ---- of wildebeests
    I traveled ----- with the herd

    My long feathers ---- were like the Rainbow
    Some were Green ----- and Blue and Red
    My Crest ----- stood tall and stately
    And was like a Crown ----- upon my head

    My Wings ----- were like the Seagull's
    That fly along the shore
    I'd meet them in the clouds
    And teach them ----- how to soar

    I walked ----- in front of Lions
    I knew the Elephant ----- and Giraffe
    I talked ----- with the Hyenas
    I loved ----- to make them laugh

    The Continent ----- was my Home
    There was no need ---- to build a Nest
    I would find ----- a shady tree
    if I needed ----- a place to rest

    The days ---- were warm and sunny
    The African ----- days were long
    The land ----- was full of plenty
    And I sang ----- a carefree song

    There were beautiful ---- Lakes and Rivers
    Africa had the bluest Sky
    And I ----- was always happy
    There was ---- no need to cry

    But then ----- the White Man came
    Full of Greed ----- and Rage
    He caught me ----- in his trap
    And put me ----- in a cage

    Living ---- in Captivity
    Soon ----- became the norm
    I lost ------ my wings and feathers
    And took on --- a Human form

    Changing from Bird to Human
    Was the strangest thing
    No longer ----- could I fly
    No longer ----- could I sing

    In a Human body
    I endured ----- enormous pains
    Too big ----- for my cage
    They placed me ---- in some chains

    Living ----- as a Human
    I learned to be ----- strong and brave
    They took me ---- to a fortress
    which was as dark ----- as any cave

    Just outside ------ the fortress
    were large ships ---- about to sail
    I called ----- out to the Lion
    But it was ---- to no avail

    They marched us -----through a passage
    which I ----- would later learn
    led to ----- a special door
    called 'The Door ----- Of No Return'

    I was put on ---- a great big ship
    Which was docked ------ along the shore
    I would never ----- see my Africa
    My Homeland ----- Anymore
    Last edited by RhymeLovingWriter; 07-21-2019, 08:38 AM. Reason: Request of original author

  • #2
    I know there are at least two typos 'clouds' and 'placed' were misspelled. I will fix them later. Everytime I edit a poem the sytsem flags the post as spam and makes it unavailable until a moderator finally clears it! so I will wait

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      I can fix those for you if you'd like.

    • Rhymeboy
      Rhymeboy commented
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      Yes RLW!!!! Please do! I would appreciate that! 'clouds' in 3rd stanza 3rd line. 'placed' in 11th stanza 4th line.Thank You!!!

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Sorry it took me a couple of days until I logged on and saw your response. Should be fine now.

  • #3
    Sweet way of wording, this very good poem in my opinion! I like the way it makes you think beautiful thoughts and indeed makes you feel caged as the story continues into that cage. Well put together!

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    • Rhymeboy
      Rhymeboy commented
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      Thank You very much Jazzy G for your very kind words . . . and Welcome to The Zone! I look forward to interacting with you many more times in the future!!!!!!

    • Rhymeboy
      Rhymeboy commented
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      Jazzy G . . . Nice graduation photo by the way!!

    • Jazzy G
      Jazzy G commented
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      No problem and thanks 4 the welcome. I appreciate ya!

  • #4
    Yes RhymeLovingWriter Please do! Please fix them!!! I would appreciate that! 'clouds' in 3rd stanza 3rd line. 'placed' in 11th stanza 4th line.Thank You!!

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    • #5
      I like this style of poetic storytelling. Nicely done.

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      • Rhymeboy
        Rhymeboy commented
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        Thank you AtL! I appreciate you stopping by to comment!

    • #6
      Thank you RhymeLovingWriter!!!!!!!! You're a lifesaver!

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      • RhymeLovingWriter
        RhymeLovingWriter commented
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        Glad I could help!

      • Rhymeboy
        Rhymeboy commented
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        Thanks again,RLW!!!!!

    • #7
      Rhymeboy

      I can see the obvious analogy here to the sad plight of the African slave. Sad. I like the way you have the rhythm beeat back and forth with the verses cut byb the pause of the periods. Nice.

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      • Rhymeboy
        Rhymeboy commented
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        Thanks for commenting on my poem,fasteel!!!!! I appreciate your time and I look forward to interacting with you in the future!!!! And by the way . . .Welcome to The Zone!!!!!
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