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  • Involuntary Professions

    Here I stand
    in the presence
    of your mess
    It's me in the flesh
    living the life of the death of my heart
    with each breath
    the ice collects
    onto this sexy a** Givenchy dress
    as I deflect those
    defying tears
    it's a sweet,
    but silent acquiesce
    of this boss self made chick
    who can attest
    to the dramatic effect
    of the
    animistic indecency
    of the
    kiss
    of the death
    I may
    Unintentionally profess

  • #2
    Cool... the shorter lines and centering worked well to the pacing and flow... pretty intense poetry.
    ending makes me ponder. I like the attitude of this one...

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    • #3
      I've read this through several times and it packs a punch.

      Also, I wonder...if you omitted the word "the" in L21 (so it reads "of death" instead "of the death")...would it pack even more?

      Enjoying your contributions...keep them coming!

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      • #4
        Thank you a very different style to the other one of yours but just as well written. Short lines give this bite.

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