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    IMPACT!

    From a depth deep chilled by the darkness
    came a dread rock hurtling thru the night.
    It was seven miles wide and Everest high
    and it wobbled with a turn to the right.

    Then it twisted like a hulu skirt, tumbling thru the universe,
    speeding meteoric like the comets only dare,
    racing thru the cosmos, mega-tons coming close.
    Life on the Earth unattentive, unaware.

    Its weight shifted massive with a movement
    from the pull of our gravitating Sun
    that pulsed a convulsion which added more propulsion
    to this asteroid ablaze and on the run.


    Then it smashed winds of Neptune, crushed rings of Saturn too,
    bounced off of Jupiter to clear the face of Mars,
    pierced thru its red dust, Moon looming up just.
    People on the Earth eating, loving, driving cars.

    I saw it flash my window ‘cross the night’s sky,
    blazing closer, burning larger like my fear
    and I knew Man was braking to a standstill
    ‘cause the clicking of the seconds I could hear.

    Then it ticked close of Mankind blasting off the face of Time,
    tumbling with his wonders thru a Space of endless black
    where Fate will claim his special brand of fashioned life by cosmic hand
    that made the dust that made the man at eternity’s brink of impact.


    Namyh

    Last edited by Namyh; 06-11-2019, 09:57 AM.

  • #2
    I liked your lightness much here, that was some beginning! Nice wordplay and rhythms maintained... I only just now after re-reading a few times, realize, that you used a formal rhyme scheme. Thanks for sharing, this brought me to some keen, fond places

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    • #3
      I just witnessed an astral pinball game 😵
      10,000 likes you win Namyh!!!!

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      • #4
        A very fun piece! I especially liked the first stanza! Very nicely done! Namyh

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        • #5
          AmenOra - When cooking this, I mixed 2 ounces of engaged "wordplay" with ½ pint of “rhyme & rhythm” sprinkled with 1 tablespoon of “fright filled phrasing”, then baked for 30 minutes for that "deep-dish" level of appreciation. It's the "End-of-the-World" takeout order, our specialty. So very happy you stopped in for a poetic bite here at the Rhymezone restaurant where there’s always something cookin’ in the oven. We never close, even when the world is ending ! LOL. Thanks for enjoying this AO. Namyh
          Last edited by Namyh; 06-13-2019, 09:55 AM.

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