Heaven

[PotterHead22807]

How far can this road take me
How far does it go
Unless I take the risk
I might never know

What lies beyond the border
Of hate and hopeless lies
I might never know
Unless I look fear in the eyes

What sort of things live
Beyond the gates of life
Is it better with hope
Or is it worse with strife

For in this horrid life
I still do not remiss
But I can't seem to find it
That place of happiness and bliss

[amenOra]

Familiar, I know the feeling of "cut off", and this little poem was nice. I was taken by the phrase "gates of life" especially, and the line "Unless I look fear in the eyes" because it's so very true, and afterwards indeed there will be no fear but only You! Beyond the border, in your words that 'gate of life' which seems so far away. Again, I think you ask good questions, and have explored your feelings in a mood that's sentimental... I would always caution against using the plain phrasing as the lines "Is it better with hope//Or is it worse with strife"-- I think it's obvious we enjoy Hope more, you know, and issues arise because we seem to 'lose' it... like you said. Those two lines weren't the strongest of your poem, in my opinion.
Thanks for sharing with us and I am glad you choose to write.

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Hello PotterHead22807 . I've been an infrequent contributor these past few months but wanted to say "welcome to the zone" and thanks for sharing the struggle of seeking heaven on earth through your poetic rhymes.