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  • Morning Sickness

    The first time I saw a teenage girl throw up I was 10. I though it was just something she ate! I had no clue! Neither did her adoring father!

    MORNING SICKNESS

    A Man ------ had a pretty daughter
    Her name ----- was Dixie Kupp
    She grew ------- into a Teenager
    And one morning ------- she threw up

    She threw up ------- all her breakfast
    She threw up -------all her lunch
    She threw up ------ Everything
    But a few ------- small sips of punch

    The next morning ------ the girl threw up
    And just like ----- the day before
    Everywhere ----- you looked
    There was vomit ------ on the floor

    Her daddy ------ sat and wondered:
    O What could ------ this ailment be?
    But now ----- SHE has a son
    And today------- he's turning three

  • #2
    Being men, we’ll never really know. Top of the queue Rhymeboy

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      Thanks for stopping by to comment Bobby Del Boy

  • #3
    Oh my gosh...this is delicious Rhymeboy . I think of how many movies I've seen where they foreshadowed unexpected pregnancies by the character "not feeling well" or vomiting. This captures that well.

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      Thank you very much for commenting on piece, RLW

  • #4
    Rhymeboy - I definitely enjoyed your insightful capture of our predictable and unpredictable human nature. The rhyme and rhythm both accented the story very well. Visually creative work RB. I liked it. Namyh

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      Thank you very much Namyh!!

  • #5

    i like. it is talent

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    • Rhymeboy
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      Thank you OtaRova!

  • #6
    O I so like this, it it a good story told by poetic devices, subtle enough with the hints that one doesn't feel the point you're trying to make is diluted. It rings with a familiar back story, of our cultural heritages, both she and "the man" her dad, as well as the new baby coming into the world. An unwinding of fate. Unfortunately, it's a vomit-inducing fate Clever and imaginative, I appreciate your words Rhymeboy.

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      Thank you amenOra! Thanks for stopping by to comment!
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