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    Big Easy


    Levees and concrete shackle your span

    where once in foaming spate you ran,

    Oh! Mississippi, great days are done!

    Now life is slaved to the will of man.

    "Rise up! Rise up! It's a palsied hand.

    While hurricanes wax, tornadoes abound."

    Bluff Nature calls, "Be at one with Earth's pain.

    Rise up! Rise up! Wash the stain from the land.

    Global Warming's a force none will withstand."
    Last edited by Johntee; 01-05-2019, 05:54 AM.

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    Hello. Fine opening couplet. Not sure about line 6, enroll in Earth's plan is pretty vague and the metre seems off. Also, line 8 seems too long - "Global Warming will not be canned" would do it.

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Noted. I've shuffled and rewritten lines but you'll find the metre still wandering syllabically 9,8,9,9,9,10,10,10,10
      Last edited by Johntee; 01-05-2019, 05:59 AM.
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