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  • In Temper’s Heat

    What I just said in temper’s heat
    when should have let it lie.

    Too late the fool who spoke too soon
    and such a fool am I.

    Those words I spat so hastily so,
    my character betrayed.

    The self-degrading aftermath;
    if I had just delayed.

    A knife would not a deeper cut,
    such pain is not concealed.
    My tongue unleashed, a fit of pique,
    my insolence revealed.

    I blame her not for fleeing me,
    no counsel could repair.
    To lash the heart of one’s own love,
    takes but a fool, I swear.

    And though I wear a classic style,
    becomes not what I am.
    The tailor makes the three-piece suits
    but not the gentleman.

    I must abide by just deserves,
    to bear what weighs on me.
    To know that she still suffers so
    and I, her misery.

    I pray someday she’ll find her peace
    and she to love again.
    And let whatever comes of me;
    what comes of stupid men.


  • #2
    Oh, how beautiful, that ending, especially the last three stanzas! Like the title, too, and think you fleshed out a really eloquent piece about introspection (specifically of the male creature it seems); there is obviously the understanding, so the speaker isn't devoid of empathy. I feel akin to them, as well, for I've been dealing with much the same thing. Wondering what the invectives really accomplish. Our senses lie...

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello amenOra, An innocent man in a moment of madness and forever to regret. No man is a complete gentleman, especially the ones I've met. Delighted you enjoyed this one and your fine response is very much appreciated. All the best, Tony.

  • #3
    Oh my! A lovely verse. Well done and true

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello lunar glide, True indeed and in some way, all of us. Thank you very much. You are well I trust, Tony

  • #4
    Well done and said. Enjoyed it.

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello Alexandra, Delighted you enjoyed this one and your words are very much appreciated. Fond regards, Tony.

  • #5
    allot of quilt in this poetry and what a man to admit to it. words were very strong and rhyme brilliant. loved this poem and thank you for writing.

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello pomezone, You are very welcome and I am gladdened that you enjoyed it so. Take care now, Tony.

  • #6
    ... and hindsight's cooling. Well told, Tony!

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello Muttado, Hindsight, always, always too late. Thank you very much, my fine fellow. All is well with you, I trust, Tony.

  • #7
    I must abide by just deserves,
    to bear what weighs on me.
    To know that she still suffers so
    and I, her misery.


    Normally it would be 'just deserts'
    but having picked at it I guess you chose deserves
    to better match 'suffers so.'

    Another great piece.

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello Johntee, Or, I must abide my earned deserves, what do you think? Your response is very much appreciated. Kind regards, Tony.

  • #8
    Tony, Tony, Tony - I want to thank you for this wonderful poetic indictment of how we men are guilty of thoughtlessly mouthing off and later regretting it like the dirty dog jerks we can't help sometimes being. LOL. It's in our nature. However, your extensive medical work here might just be the helping hand that prevents us falling into a hole or the hand that helps us to get out of one. Thanks for this shot of immunity Dr. T. I'm feeling better already and will be back in two weeks for booster shots! LOL. Much enjoyed. Namyh

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    • Tony Grannell
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      Hello Namyh, You are very welcome. Just one more appointment so we may discuss my fees - hahaha! I am delighted you enjoyed this one. All the best, Tony.

  • #9
    Really excellent read and topic Tony.

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    • Tony Grannell
      Tony Grannell commented
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      Hello straightryewhiskey, Your response finds me very pleased indeed and for that, I thank you very much. Kind regards, Tony.
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