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  • Death's Lullaby

    Numb, broken, cold body to the ground
    You lived, you fought, but you're nothing now
    Your life, your future, fading before your eyes
    No life, no will, a wasted state of mind

    The shadows of a once standing man
    Disappear, dissipate, just blood in the hands
    Destruction to the core, the time draws close
    Resuscitation, not enough for your dying soul

    It's time to go, it's time to leave
    The world that had wronged you
    So as you lay here in the silence, nothing else
    Death will now sing you to sleep

  • #2
    Cool, Bry89. Killer last line! Liked the way it flowed and your rhymes therein. Simple, and effective. I like the title, it's definitely familiar to my heart, thanks for sharing

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    • Bry89
      Bry89 commented
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      No problem

  • #3
    This reads to me as from someone who has dealt with terminal illness and made peace with our temporary time on this earth plane. The mating of 'death' usually a cold and separating concept with 'lullaby' usually a warm or comforting concept - works well.

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    • Bry89
      Bry89 commented
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      Actually, this was written in the perspective of someone who lost a tense fight, more so from war, and with death the only way out for the victim when survival seems futile. Even more for the "blood in the hands" bit. Thanks for your commentary as always

  • #4
    Loved the last line Bry. Nicely done!!

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    • Bry89
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      Yep, I like it myself It was in my head for a bit and I really wanted to slip it in somewhere.
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