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    Off the peg suit
    Supermarket non iron shirt
    Once fashionable silk tie
    Shoes that have seen better days

    Second rate uniform
    With a resigned smile
    Caged in conformity
    Failure an option

    Never his fault
    Life’s injustice
    Put to rights
    Respecting no others


    Phased by no issue
    Ready with a quip
    Cuts to the bone
    Cuts to the quick

    Ambles along
    Sarcasm path
    Sound bite
    Of discontent

    Judge jury
    Vigilante
    Easier to condemn
    Than engage
    Last edited by Parkinsonspoet; 09-01-2018, 05:53 PM.

  • #2
    Great images, and a familiar mood ... your keen observations, about a type of person I presume... I know I've been there; it's common, we're human. And who's condemning whom, nice end.
    Liked the feel of this one!

    Is it based off someone in particular in reality? It must be!

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    • Parkinsonspoet
      Parkinsonspoet commented
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      You are right I did have someone in mind but at a much younger age I had a similar tendency. I wrote it now because a thoughtless journalists remarks in an article reminded me. As to who condemns who it goes both ways he condemns everyone but our acceptance and expectation condemns him

  • #3
    I know someone like this! Lol! Excellent poem!

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    • Parkinsonspoet
      Parkinsonspoet commented
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      he is less unique than I would hope

    • Rhymeboy
      Rhymeboy commented
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      Lol! 'he is less unique than I would hope' sounds like the beginning of a new poem . . . perhaps a sequel!!!!!!

  • #4
    The short lines work really well here, Parkinsonspoet. You sketch out someone vividly with an economy of words, which is something I like to aim for when I write. To my mind, the first line is perfectly pitched: I love the bare bones English of it, 'Off the peg suit', its laconic resonance. Same with 'Cuts to the bone / Cuts to the quick'. Salutes.

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    • #5
      Nicely done John. I agree with Grant - the short phrases almost staccato give it a serious and sharp edge to it.

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      • Parkinsonspoet
        Parkinsonspoet commented
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        thank you Alexandra
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