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    A weathered piece of wood is he
    Been dragged along the shore
    He tries to hold the river back
    But drags him more and more
    While sitting at the water’s edge
    Just bobbing with the flow
    A twinkle from the sky above
    'Lil glisten starts to grow
    An ambling little dance on high
    That's carried on the breeze
    A little ray of sun descends
    And flits among the trees
    This song-less wonder comes to him
    Alight upon his side
    So quietly she flaps her wings
    And he is mystified
    A butterfly of glass is she
    A fragment of the sky
    For him to try to catch her love
    His efforts will be nigh
    But for a moment he's transformed
    Upon him there... a flower
    Oh, could it be that life returns
    if only for an hour?
    The movement of her petaled wings
    Seem mirrored now within
    And when this blossom flies away
    He takes it on the chin
    A butterfly of glass is she
    Her beauty can't contain
    For if you try to hold her down
    To both will cause much pain
    A weathered piece of wood is he
    Been dragged along the shore
    He tries to hold the river back
    But drags him more and more
    A window to the soul it's said
    And so please look away
    The effort made to keep concealed
    A simple glance betrays

  • #2
    I'm surprised this hasn't caught comment,
    you make a better job than me
    of rhyming in consistency
    and as for phraseology
    "Upon him there... a flower
    A butterfly of glass is she" well really,
    is there need to say more?
    Last edited by Johntee; 08-21-2018, 08:48 AM.

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    • #3
      Beautiful lilt throughout J. Quintanilla ! Welcome to the zone!

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      • #4
        I also enjoyed this one, thought it was written well. You set up what has the richness and tone of almost fairy-tale wonder, and the flow only bolsters that. The way you repeat those lines makes the poem that much better, and solidifies the mood overall. Good job, and hope you enjoy it here!
        Peace

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        • #5
          @Johntee @RhymeLovingWriter @amenOra Thank you for the kind words.

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