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  • The Measure of Love

    How does one measure breadth or depth of love?
    For if such ledger ever was designed
    Then reason would to every heart rebuff.
    So in this way must love be ever blind.

    If love be love it cannot count the cost
    Or repossess what it in ransom pays.
    Expecting such is love already lost
    When worth decides whether or not it stays.

    But if I must assign it some amount
    Let time together be the cost we share
    And by that measure, as for love's account,
    Let us not leave a coin of it to spare.

    I'll precious count each moment yet in store.
    My love, I offer all to you and more.
    Last edited by BiocideJ; 08-18-2018, 04:38 AM.

  • #2
    Well done, I enjoyed. I like the third stanza, and then that wrap-up.

    Clear thoughts, and effective rhymes! Kudos!

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    • BiocideJ
      BiocideJ commented
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      Thank you. The third stanza is my favorite as well and was the part I spent the longest trying to get right so I'm glad to read this. The rest of the poem came together rather quickly, but that 3rd stanza took four distinct iterations to get right.

    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Perfectly done. Your editing was well worth the extra effort. Beautiful sonnet!!!

  • #3
    No misspent time
    if ribbon wrapped
    these words distill
    to art sublime

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    • #4
      As a sonnet lover I truly enjoyed this Biocide. The only trouble I had was my tongue keeps getting caught on line 3 but your syllable count, rhymes and lines were right on the mark.

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      • BiocideJ
        BiocideJ commented
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        I'm glad you said this because in re-reading it, I also found that line troublesome. I have edited the 2nd and 3rd lines of the first stanza which I feel now is much easier on the tongue and says what I mean to say more clearly.

    • #5
      "Let us not leave a coin of it to spare."

      Oh yes. Perfectly yes.

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      • BiocideJ
        BiocideJ commented
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        thank you.

    • #6
      I thought the last 2 lines were the best! And the second stanza. And yes the line RLW pointed out is perfect. Reallly nice!

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      • BiocideJ
        BiocideJ commented
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        Thank you so much. And I edited the first stanza so hopefully it can be up to par with the rest now.

    • #7
      Biocide - I believe you've touched in words that truly elusive measure of Love.....Time! Thanks a lot for reminding us. Namyh

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      • #8
        There's more than a hint of Shakespearean style in this well wrought sonnet, Biocide. It's good to see a classic form wielded with such skill.

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