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    At the Beach


    Bucket and spade

    The beach transformed

    by tiny hands

    going tired home

    the tide has turned.


    And in the wash

    tall ramparts fall

    as diamond bright

    the Evening Star

    watches over all.


    Bucket and spade

    The sand terraformed

    by tiny hands

    and in the violet sky

    the Earth hangs low.

  • #2
    Hello Johntee, The beloved evening star as the earth hangs low. This is a lovely poem, truly - a joy to read. Well done indeed. Fond regards, Tony.

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Thanks Tony, the final verse was intended
      to invoke the Martian sky as seen by Mr. Musk's colonisers.
      Taking your observation on To a Poet Be
      I wondered how Bipolarity might be expressed.
      Last edited by Johntee; 04-19-2018, 09:21 AM.

  • #3
    Gorgeous.

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Thanks SG. I had started a run of these 5 line stanzas after MHenry's
      appeal for Ryuku (I haven't fared very well (insufficient boundaries))

  • #4
    This poem hangs like a jewel as well, and each reader adds their light. Excellent!

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Thanks LG The Diamond Light Source at Culham turned up in the news this week
      finding an enzyme to eat plastic
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