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  • Lost poetry

    Slipping inside my heart and soul, there's a voice inside,
    that wants to break free, from the shackles of society,
    watch the past and the future unfold,
    secrets of the lost poetry



  • #2
    I love the last line, Ghostwriter! Your use of "inside" twice in the first sentence did turn me off however. Saying //a voice inside//that wants to break free//
    -- is more telling me than showing, and it could be much more effective to really put something symbolic or metaphorical of what that means and feels to you.

    Thank you for sharing your 'lost' poetry.

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