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    Hello. I'm a Russian poet and it's my first poem in English. Would you be so kind to go through it and check if it's understandable and grammatically correct? Thank you in advance.

    I had lost the keys to summer.
    I was searching in the yard,
    Then I saw a lone newcomer
    Walking down the boulevard.

    Change was coming and he spoke it,
    Stripping leaves from all the trees,
    Something sparkled in his pocket
    And I saw his golden keys:

    Golden keys that once would find we.
    So I crossed the shadow's side
    And had left the wind behind me
    Lifting up the kite untied.

    There are often ways to ravel
    In the autumn heaven-dome,
    So the long and hopeful travel
    Gently led me to the home.

    Oh, that day I was the runner
    Who had finished at the start:
    I had lost the keys to summer
    And have found 'em in my heart

  • #2
    It's more than understandable it's excellent enough that if english was your first language you should still be proud of this one.

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    • #3
      Yes, Andy, I see no grammatic problems, nor hangups on language. You crafted a nice piece, and it rang of pure poetry to my ears. Enjoyed it a lot, thanks for sharing.

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      • #4
        Thank you for your inspiring feedback.

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        • #5
          Got it, Amazing! I love your poem and the words you use are very great and I and say this with pleasure that this is a great initiate by you. I really love the way you write this poem and so I’d love to give you my best wishes with https://www.sitejabber.com/reviews/edubirdie.com website that provide useful material for students and writing tips, Keep it up!
          Last edited by MikeMax3; 12-27-2018, 05:06 AM.

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          • #6
            Excellent poem! No one would ever guess that English was not your first language! Well done Andy! And Welcome to the Zone! I look forward to seeing more posts from you!

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            • #7
              Well done Andy. The third stanza in my opinion needs a little work. Really enjoyed it.

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              • #8
                no proplem from me. beautiful poetry flowing well and don't worry about keys to summer you got the keys to poetry. keep unlocking.

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