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    Written in blood




    These empty sad rooms echo of the people who once lived here

    Elegant tattered curtains swaying from the cold wintry drafts

    Happy Light filtering warmly through the cracks so very clear

    Displaying dancing dust particles covering handmade crafts




    Oh the love and laughter these walls and floors once embraced and felt

    Children’s giggles from running and playing in delightful chaos

    Water stained floors from snowy puddles brought in then slowly melt

    Like many pages in a book that’s what this house said to us




    But in a small room towards the back, secluded from the rest

    A room sparsely furnished without any sign of elegance

    Had a wall with a written plea for help there in blood confessed

    Evoked such a chill as we felt the desperate sense of helplessness

  • #2
    Well done Alexandra. A mysterious write for you.

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  • #3
    A great story here, AlexandratheLate I must say that 'Happy Light' filtering was an incredible pairing of words.... it instantly took me to the room and I felt the Happy Light!

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you very much Suz-zen.

  • #4
    Well written ATL, I admire your ability to craft such a poem!

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  • #5
    Excellent stage setting on this - I almost feel like it's a prelude to an even larger story. Am I right? Or do we just let our imaginations grip us with that ending?

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    • AlexandratheLate
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      Thank you very much Paula. There might be....🤔

  • #6
    Thank You for the welcome into your Macabre! ATL Nice

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  • #7
    Thank you very much NY for the like.

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    • #8
      If walls could tell stories!
      Like a previous piece
      on an upstate castle
      this feels like
      somewhere
      you've
      been.
      Last edited by Johntee; 04-09-2018, 07:35 AM.

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      • #9
        Thank you very much Johntee.

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        • #10
          Thank you very much Micworthy for the like

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          • #11
            Thank you very much NY sonnet for the like.

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            • #12
              Brilliant write, AtL!!!!

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              • AlexandratheLate
                AlexandratheLate commented
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                Thank you very much Darth. I really appreciate it.

            • #13
              Sprawling, voluminous, and a nice end cap of Such a stirring vibration. Thanks for sharing, loved the dancing language and all of it, really!

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              • AlexandratheLate
                AlexandratheLate commented
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                Thank you so much amenOra. Truly appreciate your reading and commenting.

            • #14
              Brilliant poem! Loved every word about it

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            • #15
              I was going to comment on how I love going through old homes, the nostalgic places where grandparents and great-grandparents grew up... I love tapping into the emotions evoked by such places... and then I got to your final two lines. CREEPY!!! (And, I got myself right back out the door!)

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