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    23 years ago I became a dad
    Life lessons since then I’ve certainly had.
    Leaned, well not really, , how to put up girl’s hair
    Learned the hard way no toys on the stair.
    Learned how to sit through elementary school plays
    Learned how to amuse them on long rainy days.
    Have put together toys more complex that cars
    Have taken them for walks and pointed out stars.
    Have lived through hissy fits and of course sulky bouts
    And had to live through their tears and their shouts.
    Had to fix bicycles, puts swings up in trees
    Had to fix scrapes on elbows and knees.
    It’s been an adventure that I will say
    But I would not give away one single day.

  • #2
    Parenthood encapsulated nicely Peter.

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    • Peter.Dee
      Peter.Dee commented
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      Thank you

  • #3
    That's a good attitude to have, yea. A few errors typographical in the third line, but otherwise the poem was sound, good "voice", familiar tone, ended with a good resolution.

    Oft-spoken advice I take to myself: Try to show us rather than tell us how and what you mean to say. It's a lot more effective. And I am in Missouri, the Show Me state. LOL :P

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    • Peter.Dee
      Peter.Dee commented
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      Thanks amenOra. I appreciate the feedback. My problem is that I tend to suck at proofreading

    • amenOra
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      it's no big deal anyway. the point is the poetry had meaning, a reason, i could gather a sense about your world...

  • #4
    This is so true. Nicely done.

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    • Peter.Dee
      Peter.Dee commented
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      thank you Alexandra

  • #5
    I didn't give away one single day of mine and I'm glad you wouldn't either very nice TY PD

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    • Peter.Dee
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      Time smooths out the rough edges. I suspect when they were 13 I may have wanted to give away a day or two. Thanks TS

  • #6
    Awww, such a sweet poem! So lovely, and written so well!

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    • Peter.Dee
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      I'm glad you like it NY. Thanks
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