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  • Raoul D'Harmental
    started a topic A Daydream

    A Daydream

    When the clash and clang of steel on steel
    Becomes a faint and distant peal
    And when the red mist of war fades
    Away, the sweet bliss of green glades,
    I seek. The rustle of the leaves
    Born of the sigh that silence heaves
    Mutes the clamour within my ears.
    Faint echoes now are the slain's tears;
    Dim, too, their forms as, with a sigh,
    I bid them - friend and foe- goodbye.

    I gaze awhile at the blue sky-
    The field on which clouds gently lie.
    I gaze until my soul floats free
    Unchained from its burden - me.
    She does not leave me on my own-
    Gently, she lifts me and I'm flown
    From what is real instead to skim
    And trace the edges of the brim
    Of the Unreal domain where she
    Holds undisputed sovereignty.

    The Unreal where guilt, hate and doubt
    Are banished to the world without;
    Where truth, peace and hope overwhelm
    My mistrust of the phantom realm.
    'Imagined, yes', whispers my soul.
    'But without this, you are not whole!'
    She adds, 'Here, my will is supreme
    And I will you to pine and dream!'
    Gladly, I yield and with a smile
    In the Unreal, I dwell awhile.


    (Such beauty dreamed amid the day!
    No passing fancy, here you stay
    To languish fair amid sweet dreams -
    Though all may not be as it seems.
    Yet lovely lift of spirits tell
    Of 'other-world' where phantoms dwell.
    Brought back, when waked, to present real
    And shared in verse - this dream surreal.)


    (PS: These verses allude to the attached image. And many thanks to RhymeLovingWriter who contributed the final verse.)
    Last edited by Raoul D'Harmental; 02-26-2018, 06:06 AM.

  • Raoul D'Harmental
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    Done! Thanks once again R

  • RhymeLovingWriter
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    I'd be honored if you find it suitable. Thank you very much!

  • Raoul D'Harmental
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    Hi RLW,

    Wow. What can I say? This is brilliant and I would beg your permission to add your verse to the end of the poem to make it complete. Another friend has pointed out that the poem feels incomplete and I can think of no better way to round it off than the addition of your beautiful verse!

  • Raoul D'Harmental
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    Thank you Alexandra. I am glad you in particular like this

  • RhymeLovingWriter
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    Such beauty dreamed amid the day!
    No passing fancy, here you stay
    to languish fair amid sweet dreams
    (though all may not be quite as seems).
    Yet lovely lift of spirits tell
    of 'other-world' where phantoms dwell.
    Brought back, when waked, to present real
    and shared in verse - this dream surreal.

    Lovely work Raoul D'Harmental . My rhyming ear enjoyed both lilt and lift of spirits that this work inspires. Thank you!

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  • AlexandratheLate
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    Very well done Raoul. Truly enjoyed this.

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