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    The Cyclical Cynic - Petrarchan sonnet


    Aloud and full commanding came the plea

    to right the wrongs which passing days allowed,

    and any who would not attend the crowd

    deemed obstinate, with fervent pitch decree.

    To change would serve ill omen, to the free.

    To stay the same must never be allowed!

    So rough and deep division lines get plowed

    (obscuring path of compromise to see).



    What then will come if one or other crowned

    as victor? Methods meant to halt the kill?

    Will heaven look with favor on the deed?

    Or might, despite some best attempts to drown

    out sorrow’s pool (of which we’ve had our fill)

    the curse continue, while the blameless bleed?


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    Last edited by RhymeLovingWriter; 02-23-2018, 08:59 PM.

  • #2
    Well done Paula. Really enjoyed this.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Alex. I appreciate your taking time to comment and leaving that 'like'.

  • #3
    Very powerful- I feel your passion

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Jon - I'm not sure if it's passion or frustration - or a mix of both. But I'm glad the strength of the emotion came through. Thanks for taking a look and leaving a comment.

  • #4
    Or might, despite some best attempts to drown
    out sorrow’s pool (of which we’ve had our fill)
    the curse continue, while the blameless bleed?

    All too likely. PP and I both look at this scene
    as outsiders in a country where such events
    (Hungerford Massacre, Dunblane Massacre)
    caused gun laws which were already stringent
    to be further tightened.
    It would take centuries for the USA
    to arrive where we are, still criminal gang
    drive-by shootings occur in which bystanders
    get caught, using illegally held weapons.

    Knife crimes occur in and out of school
    and knives are subject to legal restraints
    on what can be bought. Children carry them
    to defend against expected attack, this is illegal.

    Recently acid attacks have put acid purchases
    on the list of items that should not be freely bought.

    As you can see nothing defends against ill-will
    but does reduce fall-out.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      It's always about what comes from the heart of man - and how do we change that for the better? I try to do my part by living and speaking charitably. It seems the best I can do. Thank you for taking time to read and comment. I appreciate it.

    • Parkinsonspoet
      Parkinsonspoet commented
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      It is true I do look at this as an outsider. We do try to solve everything with legislation but it is not always effective. There is a need for somehow tackling the mindset of those prepared to use violence of any sort. I am too much of a pragmatist to advocate the US adopt UK style gun control.I know that wouldn't happen. What I do feel would make a difference is the control of assault rifles and machine guns these weapons kill quickly and increase the death toll. If they arm teachers with concealed weapons those teachers will be completely outgunned. Maybe it will help but I would be interested in any realistic evaluation.So I agree with RLW that we can't solve the issue with gun control, I agree that knee jerk solutions can be low value. Where we differ is I see some extra controls as an important part of the solution
      Last edited by Parkinsonspoet; 02-26-2018, 01:25 PM.

  • #5
    Wow, RLW! To take such a topic and apply a balanced logic to the questions, and then turn it into a well written sonnet that while not delving deep still gets to the heart of the matter - well done!
    Last edited by Muttado1sb; 03-04-2018, 09:45 PM.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you for taking a look Muttado1sb. I'm happy with this for a couple of reasons. 1) Like you said, I felt like it got to the heart of the matter, and 2) it's one of the first sonnets I've been able to produce with language that doesn't sound quite as 'affected' to my ear. The start of one of the later lines with 'What then' sounds a little archaic - but I think I've done a better job than on some previous attempts with the form. Thanks for leaving a comment.
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