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  • Two Takes(from Sister Greed's "Rain on me Rain"

    Two tea-bags

    standing strong,

    picking up

    when it goes wrong,

    cold for calming

    smoke strained eyes

    tears claimed

    as rain disguised

    not drowning but waving

    priced life goodbye.



    Reading the Runes


    Scrieing fate

    tells what's to come

    forgone folded

    in lines of the hand,

    in the random swirl

    of Lapsang Suchong,

    in the turn of a card

    and the Hanging Man,

    in the silver crossed

    palm's twisted frond,

    in Estrus and the old faith

    of Mother Earth.

  • #2
    nicely done. could we call these "studies". i suppose it does not make much difference what you call them-- they stand for themselves. i don't know how deep, maybe deeper than i go, but the words were beautiful. and the resounding end had me "speechless", contemplative. effective. thanks for sharing!

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      They are studies insofar as I try to understand the
      work of others by restating/condensing what I remember.
      The length/expansion I've achieved here only proves my memory's
      fallibility and the depth S G's work has shown in the past.

  • #3
    This has a lyrical sound and poignancy to it. Elicits several reads and a soaking and digesting of it.

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Thanks Alex, past reading of S G's work
      has shown me each word can mean a lot
      which is what I tried to unearth (and with Take3 tried again)

  • #4
    I like both of them too!

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Thanks RLW, riffing on the work
      of others is my way of trying to understand.
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