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    Not knowing whats at stake
    all you feel is the feel of death
    not knowing whats at stake
    you can't feel your own breath
    it might seem like just another dream
    but nobody can hear you scream
    Not knowing whats at stake
    you wish you were awake

  • #2
    Excellent Ghostwriter! Well done!

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    • Ghostwriter
      Ghostwriter commented
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      Thx! Glad you liked it

  • #3
    worst times i am actually hyperfocused on my beath and it's uncomfortable. but i know what you mean. it reminded me of stuff i have written before, ghostwriter. Thank you for sharing. If you were wanting suggestions, you might try to employ the use of 'imagery' more to get your point across, and have a certain effect.

    It could also be called the Lost hour!
    Kudos--

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    • Ghostwriter
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      Thx for the reply, It's still not completely done, I think im going to do a few changes or make a different version of it later on, but glad you liked it ^^
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