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    The sky is spread open and untroubled, sparkling a shade
    of newborn summer blue. The warmth feels stolen as it envelops those of us who enjoy alongside a wary memory
    of a killer tornado touchdown not so long ago, spawned by the shock of hot and cold clashing during a season normally gentle through trade
    of transformations.
    For this December sun, I am wearing jean shorts and sleeveless yellow top, there is no need
    of furnace or fireplace sighs lighting a wintry poem.
    We made Christmas cookies in shapes of trees cut perennial and snowmen merry as they baked. The humidity of the oven begged for a fan to be turned on
    and so it turns as a clock recycling us all.
    Insects and wasps lift wings in a somnolence which dives into my window screen
    or flails the air upon mesh with an eerily weakened buzz, the whir amplified by agitations
    of the unknown
    .


    I started this last year, set it aside and forgot it until yesterday when I ran across it in my files. I finished the lines quickly as I was in a mood to do so, but upon re-reading, caught a few flaws..
    Last edited by Katray; 12-02-2017, 11:09 PM.

  • #2
    I don't know about the 'flaws', Katray; this is gorgeous poetry. It grabbed me and didn't let go. Maybe you could tinker here and there if you wanted, but this is sheer joy to intone. Hat's off.

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    • Katray
      Katray commented
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      Thank you, Grant, I really appreciate your input!

  • #3
    PS the title is wonderful. I find the word 'coin' so powerful.

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    • Katray
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      Many thanks again. I was thinking about coin tosses and unpredictability.

  • #4
    I agree with Grant, but you know what you want. Could I ask you to republish this in black ink? I have a really hard time with colored ink and I’d like to read it again. Thank you if you will!

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    • #5
      Thank you so much, Sister and yes, I will.

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      • #6
        Wow. Thank you for sharing.

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        • Katray
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          Thank you, amen!
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