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    Opening in Three Weeks (for Johntee)


    Seasons turning, paged from Fall to nearest Solstice, Winter’s gall
    of leaves felled crisp by heat-reft ray, one-twelfth more turn to mark the day
    when heavy-hearted clods tempt ply of coldest hearts to ponder why
    and how, despondent, we shall bear these final weeks of autumn fare?

    Last sheave of weeks past harvest fest ask how is Solstice weighted best?

    In scales, it’s light as pleasure born of ‘no-school’ gift on snowy morn
    or scaled to sadness, hard to own when drifts trap one poor soul alone
    Perhaps in middling field it rests as moistured blanket, welcomed guest;
    or howling fierce as nature's pawn displaces tons from dusk to dawn

    Whatever form or weight sets tare we brace for bite - and then forbear





    A response to @Johntee's comment on"Coming Shortly to this Theater" found here. Thanks again for the invitation to try my hand at this!
    Last edited by RhymeLovingWriter; 04-05-2018, 01:59 PM.

  • #2
    Great job Paula. Great rhythm and vividly picturesque. I loved this.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you Alex. It made me think, for sure.

  • #3
    See how well
    the sacrifice has served
    to hail again the shortest day
    reshaped to a voice
    that explored the way.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you for the challenge, and license, to pursue this Johntee. Hopefully it does your work justice.

  • #4
    Great imagery, RLW, took me to a late fall day cool enough to spur the memory of winter's coming jaunt.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Happy to hear this Katray. I think that's what Johntee was going for with his original. I'd be happy if I kept close to his intent with the new telling.

  • #5
    This is a wonderful poem to fall’s turn to winter, RLW!

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