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    I take the pen with a hesitant thought
    I write down my feelings in only shallow words
    I think to myself that this may not be for the best
    To cleanse away this bleak, emotional hurt

    You would never know
    Or would even care
    For what I say to you
    You won't take in
    You won't understand
    But I'll leave my mark, here
    Just to say that I'm missing you

    I etch the words with an unstable hand
    Every sentence causes the heart to bleed
    I shouldn't dare to try to get back what's lost
    And if I succeed, it would just open new scars in me

    You would never know
    Or would even care
    For what I say to you
    You won't take in
    You won't understand
    But I'll leave my mark, here
    Just to convey a sole meaning
    Only to you

    And in this space
    Will you think of me?
    Will you return to me?
    Last edited by Bry89; 03-04-2018, 07:52 AM. Reason: Fixed one of the lines.

  • #2
    Heartbreak, beautifully 'left' to find.

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    • Bry89
      Bry89 commented
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      Indeed. Thanks for your comment

  • #3
    Very sad Bry and well expressed.

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    • #4
      A sad write and for some reason, it comes across to me as lyrics? Thanks for sharing

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      • Bry89
        Bry89 commented
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        Yep... lyrics as always

    • #5
      A hard good-bye, with scant hope. The sense of loss is strong. Well done, Bry!

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      • #6
        Bry89, hello, we haven’t met. I encourage you to choose your own words and get away from cliches. By the way, my name is Sister Greed, and I love good poetry! You have the makings for it if you dig a little deeper. What is emotional hurt really? Is it the fire in your chest when you walk in on her with another lover? Is it the thud of your emotions when you wake up and remember you’ve lost your lover and have to fake it through the day? Is it every woman with brunette hair on the subway looking like her while you’re trying to break your addiction to her? Do you get where I’m coming from? If you’re going write for us, write. Don’t skirt around your feelings! Looking forward to very good pieces from you! The talent is there. Dive in.

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        • Bry89
          Bry89 commented
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          I think I've done the best I could with this, and I personally don't think it can be any better. And by the way, this piece wasn't really to do with love... it's of a lost friendship and of one's attempt to reconnect to him/her. Thanks for your feedback though.

          Also, I've written many others that you would see scattered around here

      • #7
        Beautiful

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