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  • Cacophony

    Breaking, bashing, creaking, crashing
    Pandemonic pounding pain
    Reverberating bone to brain
    Slamming, smashing, thrumming, thrashing
    Mechanical chaotic quake
    Echoing; can't concentrate

    Scraping, scarring, jangling jarring
    Bastard, broken beat becomes
    Endless, dreadful demon drums
    Maiming, marring, ringing, roaring
    Blaring banging babel beats
    Repeats, repeats, repeats, repeats

  • #2
    This almost hurts to read! If you wanted a sound explosion in the reader's brain - it worked that way for me. I felt like I was in a construction zone!

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    • BiocideJ
      BiocideJ commented
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      Success then. I have a definite sense of general anxiety after writing it. It's amazing how painful that many hard consonants can be string together like that. Thanks for the comment.

  • #3
    Turned up to 11, indeed. I see the silent, Munch-ish scream.

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    • BiocideJ
      BiocideJ commented
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      I guess that is what I was aiming for so thanks.

  • #4
    Great use of alliteration, and overall diction.

    Evokes the sensation of Chinese Water Torture!

    Extremely effective!

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    • BiocideJ
      BiocideJ commented
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      I was actually going to start the poem with dripping, dripping, dripping, dripping at one point so you are spot on with my intent.
      This was very fun to write and I'm happy to see it was understood (if painfully).

      Also, I stumbled on this new word when researching. Misophonia - dislike or aversion to sound
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