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    A Maiden Tale


    A maiden traveling far and back
    pretended there was naught she lacked;
    yet when her needs came clear again,
    found more to ink than met the pen.

    In search of golden straw, not black,
    a maiden traveling far and back
    redounded past beginnings small
    to fill each empty fodder stall

    with honeyed hay of finest strand.
    Inquisitive in fashion grand,
    a maiden traveling far and back
    encountered fairies, far off track.

    Returning then, from fantastiqué,
    to woo her farmer, mildly meek,
    she lost her way again. Alack!
    A maiden, traveling far and back.



    Today, I felt a quatern coming on - such fun. Pretty ho-hum from the soaring escapades of some, but right in my wheelhouse. If you want to learn more about this form check out this link (I think MHenry was the one who led me there, many moons ago):
    http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/quatern.html

  • #2
    that's a delight a joy to read

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks Parkinsonspoet. It was hoped to be! It was suggested on another site that it's a bit sad - so perhaps there will come a part II, in which her fortunes take an upturn, to continue her saga.

  • #3
    This rhythm of your poem skips and skates Paula. Very nice!

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  • #4
    I enjoyed the rhythm Paula and weaving.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks Alex! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

  • #5
    Laid waste by fairies, there's a twist I didn't see coming.

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  • #6
    No golden thread
    from well spun hay?
    No wonder fairies
    stole her way.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      We'll see Johntee. I sense this maiden's wanderings have not yet found permanent cease. Anything could happen!

  • #7
    This is one of my favourites, from you!

    Not a wasted line, or phrase!

    I especially loved

    A maiden traveling far and back
    pretended there was naught she lacked;
    yet when her needs came clear again,
    found more to ink than met the pen.


    Exquisite work, poet!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thank you much for kind words DWAYNE. I too liked the way that particular phrase turned itself out.

  • #8
    I love it and I too love the line found more to ink than met the pen - a little autobiographical perhaps? Brilliant

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Almost certainly. Thanks Karen!

  • #9
    ‘Hey, hey mama said the way you move’, though it should be ‘Hay, hay’, and the move is ‘far and back’. Nice form well filled, RLW! Hopefully the maiden will have better luck in part 2.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      I'll just have to wait and see. She hasn't clued me in yet!
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