Over a barrell

[Parkinsonspoet]

Death

One word

One purpose




Can we get a handle on it

Some will cry freedom

Some cry for those ,lost




As they roll out the barrel

Bullet in a china shop

Ricochet randomly kills




Trigger finger points to death

Tool with a hammer to fall

Cocked as a rite. Right to life?




Men claim for self protection

Butt can they holster egos

Or find the range to target




Not fake news the headlines fire

Full content of magazine

Emptied as gun salutes murder




One purpose

One word

Death

[Bobby Del Boy]

Jon, you hit the target in the Bullseye with this poem. Clever lines across the board.

[Parkinsonspoet]

Thank you I was prompted by the discussion in Tanners safety poem. I truly believe if America restricted guns more than it does less will die

[RhymeLovingWriter]

I like the way you've structured this Jon. I particularly like the 'rite/right' playing off each other. Smartly done.

[Parkinsonspoet]

thank you and I am grateful for your comments, have been thinking of you recently. Hope you are okay

[RhymeLovingWriter]

It's up and down - I'm pretty sure everyone follows a similar process in grief - just at his/her own pace. Am taking it one day at a time. Thank you for the kind thoughts and mention.

[Parkinsonspoet]

you take care

[grant hayes]

When I first read this, I was reading too closely, with focus on effects, and I failed to appreciate it fully. I have read it again, and it's as if scales have fallen off my eyes. From a step back, its power emerges; read aloud, it is a knockout. The puns and play on common phrases work with the rhythm to make a cogent poetic statement.Toppest of drawers, Parkinsonspoet.

[Parkinsonspoet]

Thank you. It is my response to the debate on Tanners Safety in America. I am always aware that my proclivity for puns has to stay in balance for a subject such as this. I thank you for such great feedback because I rejected phrases using pistol whipped, blanks, misfire and recoil because they didn't quite fit and I limited the number of stanza's as I felt making it too long counter productive. You provide confirmation my instincts were good

[RhymeLovingWriter]

Your instincts were spot on.

[Muttado1sb]

Well said with wit making your points on target, Parkinsonspoet!

[Parkinsonspoet]

thank you the target was all in this poem

[mooneyblack]

Congratulations on tackling a difficult topic in a unique and powerful way - the way you open and close just demands attention

[Parkinsonspoet]

Thank you unfortunately the simple start and end is very true