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    The Dry (Given a Go for Grant)7th Nov. 2017

    This came out of the comment stream
    of Grant's "Bless the Grey."
    where it was an 'On the fly' comment
    (taking 5 minutes to construct)
    that Grant thought would stand alone,
    lengthened now as suggested.
    (taking a couple of hours of sweat)
    How successfully is a matter for
    others to judge.

    In thunderheads
    the Thunderbird,
    summoned by
    the thirsting land,
    wanders high
    above man's sorrows
    to bless or damn
    with even hand
    searching for a
    Sacred Chant
    to follow feet
    in circling dance.
    A time of trance,
    man and earth one,
    ancestral, sonorous,
    a sweating raise of dust,
    a devil twisting drought
    in trust of rain.

  • #2
    I love that john tee


    • #3
      I think your hours of sweat have paid off, Johntee. The mix of near and occasional rhyme and assonance/consonance makes this winsomely musical, and the subject is agreeably numinous. Your dance/trance rhyme reminds me of Yeats' 'Byzantium'.
      At midnight on the Emperor's pavement flit
      Flames that no faggot feeds, nor steel has lit,
      Nor storm disturbs, flames begotten of flame,
      Where blood-begotten spirits come
      And all complexities of fury leave,
      Dying into a dance,
      An agony of trance,
      An agony of flame that cannot singe a sleeve.


      • Johntee
        Johntee commented
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        Thanks Grant,
        I've copied your Yeats excerpt
        into 'Word' for later absorption.

    • #4
      Quite a lovely dust devil, Johntee, with just a promise of rain!


      • Johntee
        Johntee commented
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        Thanks Muttado,
        Grant's 'Grey' skeleton
        was probably fleshed
        in quite a different way.

    • #5
      Powerful medicine, indeed. Nicely done.


      • Johntee
        Johntee commented
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        TV time well spent then?

      • RhymeLovingWriter
        RhymeLovingWriter commented
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        Why not? So little is worth watching there these days.