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    Public Service 4th Nov. 2016



    “I'm in a dark place,”

    The ad., though it's for mindfulness,

    in sombre tones and flattened voice

    only makes me think of Guinness,

    epitome of dark-drink loneness

    swaddled in a dingy bar

    and Arthur's patrons,

    bestooled Auld Fellahs,

    nursing the night in a jar.

  • #2
    What a choice connection - a mindfulness ad with the associations of Guinness in dark bars. The last two lines give it a profoundly human finish. Beautifully observed and worded, Johntee. Not enough Likes.

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Thanks Grant, the time of year
      has come round again
      but not the Ad.

  • #3
    Quite the connection, Johntee. How one can see something in opposition of its intent. Well done. I really like your use of ‘bestooled’ as I can see the ‘Auld Fellahs’ hunched at the bar nursing their pints.

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Thanks Muttado. I'm pleased to hear
      it paints a picture.

  • #4
    This is a fine tuned piece of work!

    The last 2 lines are brilliantly poignant and poetic!

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    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
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      Thanks Dwayne,
      a run out for
      an old piece.
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