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  • DWAYNE
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    I found this somewhat distinct from your other works, and yet, still in your unique style.

    I was a little awestruck by the beauty of this write.

    I especially enjoyed the poetic elements at play here, the rhyme and diction.

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  • lunar glide
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    the first stanza is especially stunning in beauty. the imagery just spellbinds and heightens my awareness perception and sensitivity to beauty. one of your loveliest shares i think.

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  • AlexandratheLate
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    This reminded me of the gods the ancients made are not all that different from the gods man makes today.

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  • amenOra
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    Very beautiful. Last stanza, slam dunk, I must say. The rain was nice, the pressure released.
    Kinda neat, the way this works. Reading over it, the rhythm is great, and the "depth" from its moving ideas... neat, clean, simple connections, simple cause and effect tied together in the middle stana.

    Dramatic depiction of your ending, as I can see/feel it.

    As the air was sliced Magenta rays dripped hot On steamy leaves And sweat rose to Heaven Finally released.

    At the end, 'god' is the one doing. Little G.
    Self-reinforcing god? Balance of Wisdom and Severity?

    Some musings. Thanks for sharing, much to digest and Enjoy. Kudos!

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  • grant hayes
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