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  • His sensitivity

    His sensitivity
    Embraced her
    Insecurity
    Making love
    To her doubts
    Till they
    Faded into
    Obscurity

  • #2
    This is a fine example of how the omission of punctuation and placement of line breaks can add great interest to a simple locution.

    His sensitivity embraced her insecurity, making love to her doubts till they (the doubts) faded into obscurity.

    His sensitivity embraced her, insecurity making love to her doubts, till they (he and she) faded into obscurity.


    The first of these is what emerges, yet the hint of the latter animates the piece with a touch of ambiguity, which - in my opinion - is a good thing.

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    • mooneyblack
      mooneyblack commented
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      Thank you, Grant - delighted with your positive response.

  • #3
    I liked how this is left to interpretation. Very clever.

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    • mooneyblack
      mooneyblack commented
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      Thank you, RLM. So glad you enjoyed it too.
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