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    I often like but don't know why
    the things I see, or hear, or try
    Something about how they present
    even if I don't get intent
    evoke feelings or make me think
    stretching my passion to the brink
    They make me smile, they make me frown
    they cheer me up, they calm me down
    But why they do is hard to say
    so I just like them anyway

  • #2
    Wonderful rhythm Mutaddo and quite catchy.

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thank you, AtL! It is a bit bouncy! :-)

  • #3
    A like for a like

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thank you, Johntee! I'm glad you like it.

  • #4
    clever presentation
    i enjoyed reading it and can imagine children being delighted by this one. ( not that it's childish, just a refreshing innocent perspective)

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thanks, lunar glide! It is just a simple poem and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I hope it would be delightful to children as well.

  • #5
    That gut reaction perhaps? I like it!

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Probably, mooneyblack. Thanks!

  • #6
    I liked the way the syntax of this
    Was a bit disorienting, and yet pleasantly so...
    And the rhymes work well to move the piece.

    My ear/eyes wanted to remove the 'ing' from stretch. But of course that is preference, and just what I seem to have come accustomed to.

    This was nice, simple, true. Thanks for sharing-

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thanks, amenOra! This came to me from reading poems here (like some of yours) that I may not understand, but something about them I enjoy. I can see what you say about the 'ing' with stretch, but to me it works with the 'things', 'something,' and 'feelings' before it.

  • #7
    This is a favorite poem yours reminded me of (phrasing more than anything). Written by Richard Brautigan:

    All Watched Over by Machines of Loving Grace

    I like to think (and
    the sooner the better!)
    of a cybernetic meadow
    where mammals and computers
    live together in mutually
    programming harmony
    like pure water
    touching clear sky.

    I like to think
    (right now, please!)
    of a cybernetic forest
    filled with pines and electronics
    where deer stroll peacefully
    past computers
    as if they were flowers
    with spinning blossoms.

    I like to think
    (it has to be!)
    of a cybernetic ecology
    where we are free of our labors
    and joined back to nature,
    returned to our mammal
    brothers and sisters,
    and all watched over
    by machines of loving grace.

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    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Thanks for sharing this poem, amenOra! I hadn't seen it before and didn't know of Richard Brautigan. Quite interesting, and I'm glad my poem made you think of something you enjoy. With all the satellites watching, technology getting into how we do farming, forestry, nature conservancy, we are getting closer to what is asked here.
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