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    Separating

    Dreams of masked figures dancing under dim lights

    Fluttering swollen eyes trying to awaken

    Hooded capes swaying under star stippled
    black velvet skies

    Suffocating from the wounds inflicted by a lover

    As life’s water, tears drip from a broken vase

    Unable to prevent a couple from separating
    like a picture torn in two

    Helpless flower cannot thrive and wilts in sadness


  • #2
    Nicely done, really enjoyed this the structure and the very succinct beautiful descriptions. A very keen look into your mind ... or perhaps anyones.. very good use of metaphor... kudos A.!--

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you very much amenOra. Trying different styles other than my favorite which is sonnets.

  • #3
    Eloquent description of detachment.

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    • #4
      Thank you very much Dwayne. I always appreciate your comments.

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      • #5
        well written but sad truth

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        • #6
          Thank you very much Jon.

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          • #7
            Thank you very much for the like Mutaddo.

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            • #8
              Thank you for the like Darth. I really appreciate it.

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