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    Then Again


    Look
    again.
    You said I’m fine.
    I made you mine.

    Turn
    again.
    I like this view.
    I’ll marry you.

    Lost
    again.
    I told a lie
    and watched love die.

    Try
    again.
    A heart forgives
    so love can live.

    Hope
    anew.
    Another chance,
    no backward glance.

    Then
    again…

  • #2
    Love the way you finish with then again - it creates a different perspective to what the poem seemed to be leading to. Lovely.

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  • #3
    Nicely rounded.
    Trust unfounded,
    then again entrusted,
    found misfounded.
    Last edited by Johntee; 08-17-2017, 04:12 AM. Reason: Nicely rounded added

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  • #4
    The simplicity icreases the potency of this very nice structure

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  • #5
    I can share my thoughts.

    Doubt, does it ever go away? One hurt, one pain, one deception; eternal fear and wondering minimized by time and sucess. Always there

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      In some ways, for some people, it never does. Mostly I just had that phrase stuck in my head and wanted to write it into a poem. I'm glad it carried an idea with it!

  • #6
    This is perfectly stated Paula. Truly wonderful.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      This is a beautiful comment Alexandra. Thank you so much for the look, like, and taking time to leave a note.

  • #7
    The good, the bad, the doubt. Nice form, RLW! It worked well for this poem.

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Thanks Muttado1sb - it all got rolled up in one. I'm usually a little apprehensive of any type of repetitive verse - how much is enough to make a point and how much is too much? I'm glad it worked for this one.

  • #8
    Minimalist eloquence; brava!

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    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      She can be taught! (Provided one has patience with slow learners.)
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