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    Better than I dreamt
    this reality I live.
    Given more every day
    than I ever thought to give.

    Dreams of eventuality,
    so much less
    than realized reality.

    I dreamt of riches.
    Never thought of love.
    The riches failed me.
    But the love… ah the love.

    Last edited by rhymetime; 08-14-2017, 01:29 PM.

  • #2
    lucky in love-truly lucky

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you my friend

  • #3
    I dreamt of riches.
    Never thought of love.
    Alas, the riches failed me.
    But the love… ah the love.


    I'd leave out 'Alas', make it even more compact and rhythmically tight; nevertheless, this is poetry for the ages.

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Done sir,

      Thank you for suggestion and support

  • #4
    But the love...ah the love - yes indeed.

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you my dear poet friend

  • #5
    This is beautiful, thanks for sharing.

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      I am so happy that you found this beautiful

      Thank you

  • #6
    Is there a typo in the 1st verse?
    last line "than I every thought go give."

    "Better than I dreamt
    this reality I live.
    Given more every day
    than I ever thought to have"

    would be my expectation,
    but then, that's just me.

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you for reading and your thoughts. I did indeed mean "give"

    • Muttado1sb
      Muttado1sb commented
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      Maybe the typo isn't 'give' but is 'every' and 'go', as in 'than I ever thought to give'

    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      OMG you are so right. Funny how you read and miss the obvious

      Many thanks to both of you and forgive me for being so obtuse

  • #7
    To love and be loved is to be truly rich. When reality is realised to be better than dreamt eventuality one is truly blessed. Lovely, rhymetime!

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    • rhymetime
      rhymetime commented
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      Thank you very much for your kind comments
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