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    Restart

    As litter, gold and silver fill the streets
    Like bread crumbs lead to heavens pearly gates
    Their value and power now obsolete
    Crumbling idols, as gods still venerate

    Marrying, mindless eating and drinking
    Until the rains that sweep them all away
    Suddenly upon a world that's shrinking
    Striking the twelfth hour of the twelfth day

    After the smell of rotting flesh subsides
    the sun's rays filter through a brand new day
    Glory radiates from the mountainside
    And earth and man become the potter's clay

    Resurrection comes only after death
    Silent beauty exhales from life's new breath
    Last edited by AlexandratheLate; 08-01-2017, 05:21 PM.

  • #2
    The sonnet mistress returns! Bravo!

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you very much RLW for reading and commenting. Where is NYSonnet?

  • #3
    A stark juxtaposition of doom and idyll, Alexandra - the twilight of the idols, deluge, carnage, and ... genesis. Long after that flesh is quite rotted away, the memory of its stench persists, even under a new sun. Thank you for such a fine sonnet!

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    • AlexandratheLate
      AlexandratheLate commented
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      Thank you Grant for reading and commenting. I'm glad you like it. 😊

  • #4
    Yes Alexandra, what an awesome write! You reached new heights. Grant left no stone unturned with his interpretation. Top of the queue!

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    • #5
      Thank you very much Bobby my friend. I really appreciate your comments.

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      • #6
        Thank you for the like TC.

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        • #7
          I found this very powerful, thank you

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          • AlexandratheLate
            AlexandratheLate commented
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            Thank you very much Mooneyblack.

        • #8
          Thank you very much TC for the like.

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          • #9
            Wow!

            Several rhythmic phrases, and lexical gems here.

            Evoked notions of the biblical flood, and both litera and figurative rebirth.

            Some of your finest work!

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            • #10
              Thank you very much Dwayne. I really appreciate your comments.

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              • #11
                This is nice, it has the right elements, and they work together well. The shift happened early on in the poem, and the resolution is as clear as the air with a light drizzle, and not too hot at all. New life wakens.

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                • #12
                  Thank you very much amenOra

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