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  • Twister, Take 2

    So I'm late to the Party,
    seven days, Friday to Friday.
    But news-wise Okay? Okay,
    no contest, you win hands down!
    Even in the U.S.A.
    Two Tornadoes trashing Town
    setting forestry, homes, lives awry
    when you take one day away,
    is some compelling story!
    Cause effecting Effects cause.
    Is some compelling story,
    when you take one day away,
    setting forestry,homes, lives awry.
    Two Tornadoes trashing Town
    even in the U.S.A.
    No contest, you win hands down
    but news-wise, okay. Okay
    Seven Days, Friday to Friday,
    so I'm late to the party.

    As the rhyme pattern of the original 9 lines was symmetrical around line 5
    (Even in the U.S.A)
    I wondered if reversing the order of the lines would render a different reading or just Garbage
    Be my Judge.

  • #2
    Oh my - I love it! I've not tried one of these in a very long time - the form is difficult for me. You make it seem easy with the twists and turns (which suit the subject matter like hand in glove). I just heard on the news this morning that the hardest hit areas still need help with debris removal. We hope to get another load of branches hauled off tomorrow - then only one big branch left to tackle.

    Bravo for twisting the tale into something intensely new!


    • Johntee
      Johntee commented
      Editing a comment
      You seemed very Stoic in your initial response, and now you seem even more matter-of-fact. Are you located in that part of the U.S.A described as Tornado Alley?

    • RhymeLovingWriter
      RhymeLovingWriter commented
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      Smack dab in the middle. Born and raised in Kansas, land of Oz, and currently in a state nearby. People on the East coast learn to weather hurricanes, here it's tornados.

  • #3
    Beautiful form, love how you've managed to rhyme it so spontaneously!


    • #4
      Twisting like a twister, Johntee! Interesting and nicely done.